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shoo


Feb 4, 2009, 8:05 AM

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Re: [qwert] Carabiner and quickdraw FAQ *draft*
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The whole thing is very difficult to read, The two main reasons I can identify are formatting and unnecessary text. I will try to give examples as I go. Below is a piece of text I copied to best illustrate my points

In reply to:
I am trying to give a short overview about why these prices differ so much, and if (or how) it should affect your buying decisions.

I just checked some big retailers, and you get a lot of carabiners at around 7$, but on the other hand you also can easily find a lot of biners at over 12$. Same (or even more so) with quickdraws. You can get one at 10$, or you can shell out 25$.
The good (and maybe confusing) thing is: They are all fine. They will work as they should, and keep you safe.

Formatting: As JT512 pointed out, this format is extremely difficult to read. In general, you should not start a new line unless you're starting a new paragraph. If you're starting a new paragraph, you need some indication (either an extra space or an indent) to indicate that you've done so.

There are way too few section / subject headers. I don't want to read the whole thing just to find one simple piece of information.

Unnecessary text: There is absolutely no need to put half of the text you have in here. It makes it slower and more difficult reading, does not convey your points as well, and lacks an authoritative and professional tone. This will turn readers off.

If I were writing the section quoted above, it would look as follows:

In reply to:
Cost of Carabiners

The cost of climbing carabiners usually ranges from $6-$15. While they all have the same basic functionality, there is also significant variation in their specific functions. Similarly, quickdraws may vary from $10-$25, but have different feature sets which may be more desirable.

I also very much disagree with the content you have provided. You haven't provided real reasons as to why certain carabiners are more expensive. The reality is that certain carabiners have features that are exclusive to them, often through a patent. They may have more expensive manufacturing processes. They may have extra parts. I can go into more detail if you'd like. Innovators, traditionalists, and copycats aren't really the driving force behind prices.

If you are interested, there is a link below to a similar article I wrote on Knol.

http://knol.google.com/...ner/2eq51grcgbhof/2#


(This post was edited by shoo on Feb 4, 2009, 8:11 AM)



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