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wakeupjack
Sep 3, 2012, 12:00 AM
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My health is a guide, shine -ing through the night Like a beacon it leads me To the rocks on the bay My destination there holds strong Held mighty high above the rocks Against the winds of ill Who fell forlorned
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iknowfear
Sep 3, 2012, 1:48 PM
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wakeupjack wrote: My health is a guide, shine -ing through the night Like a beacon it leads me To the rocks on the bay My destination there holds strong Held mighty high above the rocks Against the winds of ill Who fell forlorned sorry, it does not quite measure up to previous rockclimbing.com poetry greatness: http://www.rockclimbing.com/...i?post=867804#867804
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dynosnore
Sep 11, 2012, 8:53 PM
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Nice job! As a critique... using the word rocks twice doesn't sound good to me. Maybe come up with a synonym the second time to avoid redundancy
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